Presentation Feedback

Dear Group members. Please review my presentation and use the critique sheet Dr. Archibald has provided to give me feedback so that I can improve the presentation.

Conference Notes

Going into the meeting I went in with an open mind and my pen and paper ready. Dr. Archibald made a few corrections to the paper. He also said to look at the discussion blog and think about using one of those to start my paper. He mentioned using an anecdote to open my paper. Also rearranging some of the paragraphs, where to add more information and go from there.

Sources for the 3ResProj

What did you do first? As soon as I met with Dr Archibald and had a clear idea of where I was going to go with this paper I started looking for information on the internet. I had done some searching prior to the meeting as well as came up with a mind map to help me with the ideas I had.

What did you do next? My first search was using webmd.com, I thought that would be a great place to get information, as it is related to health. There was quite a lot of both sides of the crash dieting world.

What you found? The majority of the articles that I found on either webmd.com or health.com were all against crash dieting. I can use that in my paper a little bit, but focusing on the side of yes it is a good thing if done right makes me have to dig deeper for what I am looking for to support my view on this.

Why these sources are important for your paper? They are important because it will support my over all view that it is okay to crash diet as long as you do it in the right manner and not go after something that will just throw your health down the drain.

Why some might not be important at all? If they do not pertain to my topic then I just move on. I have a running list on my desktop so that when ever I see something on TV about this or online I can go into that document and type in the info and save it for when I update my mind map.

Conference Notes

I went into Dr. Archibald's office knowing pretty much what I was going to do with my research paper and wanted to see his view and if I was on the right path. The topic of crash dieting can be viewed in one of two ways. One is that you can go with the doctors and other sources stating that crash dieting is bad. Two would be to go against the normal thinking and say yes it is okay to do this and give your sources who show it is okay. I chose the second choice. I felt that there is a bigger range of yes' versus the nos. I put together a mind map yesterday and that pretty much fueled my ideas in the way of the second idea. While speaking with Dr. Archibald I asked questions about sources, and if I could include some information about the bad side since I am for the good of crash dieting. He said yes, and encouraged me to think outside of the norm. I plan to do more research and put the links and other things within my mind map. Start there and develop my ideas.

ResProj Paper Ideas

1) There is an abundant amount of literature to support an overwhelming conclusion that links crash dieting and the dangerous results of poor nutrition which harms ones health as a result.  Therefore, the question begs the answer, why do it?  The answer is not as simple as to “just look good".

2) Remember the old wise saying that something that sounds too good to be true—well it simply is not. This self-defeating nutritional behavior is studied by experts and they are speaking out about such diets, like crash diets, that are dangerous to our holistic health.  According to Cardiologist Isadore Rosenfeld, MD, a professor of clinical medicine at Weill Cornell Medical College in New York City, “these very low-calorie regimens are based on the false theory that the body needs help elimination waste”.

3) Many people who chose to go into the crash dieting have done so before. They know that by doing this they can have a quick fix. So a lot of times, athletes, dancers, ect will eat how they want knowing that when the time comes that the old crash diet will come to help them out. It becomes a sort of an addiction of sorts. You get so used to it that you continue to do this. Whether it is healthy or not people just choose to do this.

• After reading these quotes from my 2Syn paper what do you think about these topic ideas?

• Do you understand what I am getting at?

• Which one sounds best to use for the 3ResProj? Why?

Integrating Sources

Example One: 

"The Master Cleanse involves consuming a mixture of water, lemon juice, maple syrup, and cayenne pepper—and nothing else—for several days. "


Example Two:

"Research suggests rapid weight loss can slow your metabolism, leading to future weight gain, and deprive your body of essential nutrients. What’s more, crash diets can weaken your immune system and increase your risk of dehydration, heart palpitations, and cardiac stress."

These two quotes show you how much doing this can effect your overall health.

First Paragraph of my 2Syn Paper

Health is something that we all want. Being healthy will in part allow us to live a healthy and long life. Why is it when it comes to dieting, we want the get quick fix rather than putting in the hard work? We go against everything that we would normally do. Go buy diet pills or just stop eating entirely. Most people do not realize just how harmful going into dieting can be. 

After reading this first paragraph what do you think my paper is about?

What is a Synthesis?

A synthesis is a combination of ideas. We use synthesis in our daily lives without realizing that we are doing so. When you have watched a movie or watched a new television show. You are synthesizing things to help put the connections together to help your friends or colleagues  see. You gather little bits of information together, looking for patterns or themes. When I looked at the two documents I could see that the main thing that linked them together was health. More so than that there were a lot of things that were different from that century to now. It is crazy the amount of things that change. You have a man who is dedicated to helping people and is a vegetarian. Has a place of business where he helps people. His ways of helping may be a little unconventional, but it worked. Crash dieting, if only people were to keep their doctors in on what they are doing the better off they would be in the long run. The majority of people would rather use their friends as their guide or just look to the internet or television to figure out what it is that they want. There are more differences from the 19^th and 20^th centuries to what we have going on now. It is amazing the things that have changed over the years and how we have become really more of a lazy society and would prefer to just take the easy way out when it comes to something as controversial as crash dieting.